Saturday, May 14, 2016

Carpe Diem Chained Together #1 " the swing of the gate" (by Southard)

Dear Haijin, visitors and travelers

For this first weekly Tan Renga Challenge I have chosen a haiku by our featured haiku-poet of September 2014, Mabson O. Southard (1911-2000) a modern haiku-poet with a special love for the classical 5-7-5 syllable-structure.

So this Tan Renga Challenge is a bit different then the other episodes of the Tan Renga Challenge which we have (and have had) on Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. The second stanza (7-7) has to be real (classical) 7-7, not easy I think, but we have to try.

Here is the haiku by Southard which is the first stanza of this first weekly Tan Renga:

Just the cellarpit;
only the catbird recalls
the swing of the gate.              Mabson O. Southard (1911-2000)  

The goal of this Tan Renga Challenge is to write the second stanza (7-7) by associating on the first stanza. As I said earlier in this post 'this time it's, because of Southard, to write a real 7-7 stanza'.

Mabson O. Southard (1911-2000)

My attempt to write a second stanza for this Tan Renga:

First stanza (5-7-5):

Just the cellarpit;
only the catbird recalls
the swing of the gate                                                    (Southard)

Second stanza (7-7):

the squeak of the backyard gate
breaking the spring night's silence                              (Chèvrefeuille)

A nice classical Tan Renga I would say. And now it is up to you my dear Haijin to create the second stanza (following the classical syllables count 7-7). Have fun!
This first episode is NOW OPEN for your submissions and will remain open until May 20th at noon (CET). I will publish our new Chained Together episode around 21st 7.00 PM (CET). For now have fun!

1 comment:

  1. just the cellar pit
    only the catbird recalls
    the swing of the gate Mabson O. Southard

    in the morning a mild day
    kissing away all her tears Joyce Lorenson

    I saw this poem as the result of a tornado or of many years... upon the couple's return, their home is gone.

    Thank you for changing the profile selection. It
    seems you are always accommodating me. Thank you for your kindness.


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